I started talking about it with Connie. I told her I had posted a sample of my book on my blog at one point. I went back looking for it. 2008? It was 2008 that I posted the introduction chapter? Four years ago? Yepper. Here it is. To read book sample 1, click here.
I initially posted it to put some pressure on myself. To write more. And so, now, I post again. I've done a lot of work since then. But not nearly enough. And if I were going to enter this contest, I'd have to have it done by the end of January. Hmmmm .... we'll see. Either way, here's another sample to lay the pressure on myself a bit thicker.
As always, your comments are welcome.
He had been her rock. He had fought for them. For the
marriage they had hoped they would one day have.
And he wanted her to fight this too. This sadness. This
grief. Fight Wendi. Fight.
He walked in and dropped his array of supplies onto the
counter: pager, keys, jump drive, palm pilot, and uniform hat. He’d only been
wearing that military uniform for a few weeks now, and she still hadn’t gotten
completely used to it. While he had been on inactive duty during his four years
of medical school, the only thing he had done remotely military during that
time was four weeks of Commissioned Officers’ Training during the summer
between his first and second years of medical school. Other than that, the only
reason they even remembered he was in the military was the stipend that arrived
every month and the absence of nasty medical school debt accumulation. But now,
here he was being saluted and called sir and shining his boots not nearly as
often as he should.
“How was your day?” she managed to ask and was relieved when he waited to fill her in and instead scooped her into his arms.
They were the same height. She had been so glad about that. At 6’3” and not wanting to date or marry someone shorter than her, her selection pool had already been significantly shrunk. Thank goodness he was her height. Both 6’3”. She had always worried about finding a guy her height. Who would have guessed she would find him at her tiny Christian school when she was in the third grade. Despite his military cut, it was easy to see that at 31, he still had a full head of brown hair. He also had the most amazing crystal clear green eyes she had ever laid eyes on. The same brown hair and gorgeous green eyes she had noticed when she was nine.
“How’s my babe?” He asked, and it wasn’t surprising to either of them when she started crying again. “That good, huh?” he joked, trying in vain to lighten her mood. She forced a grin and the deep crying that she knew would come out sometime soon, dissipated – for a moment at least.
“I had a good morning,” she said as she shuffled my feet
across the living room and sank onto their new sofa. Ten years of marriage, and
they had finally bought furniture – a new sofa, loveseat, and chair as well as
a dining room table which cost more than their first car. The furniture was a
padding – a gift to give themselves since they couldn’t get what they really
wanted. “And then, I’m not sure what it was. A commercial or something. It just
set me off. I started crying. And I couldn’t stop.”
What she couldn’t put into words was how the new furniture was a part of the problem. Everything was new. Everything was foreign. She was grieving their fourth failed attempt at invitro fertilization and the realization that they may never be parents in a home that didn’t feel like her own. Back in Minnesota, when the calls would come in that another attempt had not been successful, she could curl up on her old brown couch and cry. She could eat ice cream at the kitchen counter while
But here she was in a new town, on a military base, in a three bedroom house which was larger than anything they had ever owned. There was new furniture and unpacked boxes and the walls were all the same pale yellow. They had decided not to paint them when the housing Nazis told them that when we left in three years, they would just have to prime them all back to that drab yellow color anyway. They still owned their condo in Minnesota and were renting it out. They didn’t need to do work to a home they didn’t own and knew they would be leaving in three years again anyway. So they took a vote. It was unanimous. No painting in this house. No projects that were not vital to their lives. The walls stayed yellow. Drab yellow. Not exactly a color that evoked a sense of happiness in the midst of another round of grief.
Oh and the worst thing of all was that other than Jo hn, Wendi’s list of people she knew in the area
was pretty limited. Her husband promised that they were planning some
meet-and-greet activities that would help the spouses connect. But for now,
there was nothing and no one.
She had met a few people – neighbors mostly. And not
surprisingly, she had yet to meet anyone who did not have children in their
home. Everyone on this beautiful base bordering the bay seemed to have a young someone. “These military bases,” Wendi
had told her husband over spaghetti during their second week at Eglin, “are breeding
grounds.” Jo hn smirked. She smirked
back. “I mean it,” she continued, winding some spaghetti onto her fork and
holding it in front of her mouth while she went on. “Nearly everyone who lives
here is between the ages of 20 and 40 – the perfect age for getting pregnant
and doing so excessively and with great vigor.”
“Right. Families move a lot and the significant other doesn’t
bother to find work for a short period of time. People aren’t shacking up
because the military won’t pay for that. Oh, and long deployments meant big
celebrations upon returning home.” She sighed and stuffed the mound of
spaghetti into her mouth.
If only water was the answer. If only it were that simple.
Wendi started to tell these things to Jo hn
and then decided better of it. For one, he’d heard them before. And for two,
she was too emotionally spent to bother trying to explain something that she
didn’t quite understand herself.
Instead, she let her husband lead her to the office and back
to that broken computer desk chair. He plopped down in it, and as it made a
terrible groaning sound, he laughed under his breath.
“What?” she said, knowing exactly why he had laughed.
“Nothing,” he said back. She rolled her eyes and he pulled
up a folding chair next to him. “It’s just, well, you are such a cheap-skate.”
She started to argue but then realized it was pointless. He
was right. She had been incredibly blessed when they left Minnesota to have two
of her freelance jobs offer to keep her on, twenty hours each, via
telecommuting from their new home on Eglin Air Force Base in the panhandle of Florida. You’d think that sitting in the same place eight hours a day
would encourage her to invest a little bit of her earnings into a new desk
chair. But not Wendi.
“I’m Dutch. Remember?” she sighed back.
“That you are.”
Wendi let the comment fall and turned toward her husband.
“So,” she said.
“So,” he said back. “Are you ready for your surprise?”
She nodded, having no idea what surprise he could give her
while she was sitting in her old broken chair. He leaned over her and began
sliding and clicking the mouse eagerly, a boyish grin spread wide across his
face. His clicking led them to YouTube and a video on a page she had never seen
before.
“Well, here it is,” he mumbled and clicked play.
In the moment he clicked the button and the video started,
Wendi’s simple world as she knew it was transformed. A tiny little puppy with newly
emerging black spots began pouncing across the screen, traipsing through the
grass, playfully frolicking amidst the legs of his breeder.
“What is this?” she asked, terribly confused as the puppy jumped and grabbed
onto the breeder’s legs.
“It’s your puppy.”
“My puppy?”
He nodded. A little male Dalmatian with spots galore. “They
call him Pisser,” he laughed as they watched him play with some shoelaces
before the video came to an end and he pressed play to watch it again. “But we
can change that. Obviously.”
And for the first time in weeks, she smiled.
P.S. And while this can't be in my blog, for those of you who are interested, here is the video my husband played for me way back in 2007!
P.S. And while this can't be in my blog, for those of you who are interested, here is the video my husband played for me way back in 2007!
3 comments:
I love reading this. Can't wait to see the finished product.
I noticed a couple of 'edits' while reading and thought I'd share..
9th paragraph, beginning "I had a good morning" - "she said as she shuffled my feet..."
20th paragraph, beginning "Instead, she let her..." - "He plopped down in it..." based on the next few sentences, he, in this instance should be she.
Your writing is such a gift and I always enjoy it! I too look forward to the finished product. And I really hope you are able to enter the contest as I know it would bring you much joy and fulfillment. But, don't let it be a stressor for you! Keep it fun and enjoyable!
Another edit:
“I had a good morning,” she said as she shuffled my feet across the living room and sank onto their new sofa. - I suppose 'my' should be 'her'
First, just one more edit I think no one has caught yet: in the 9th paragraph, where it says:
"She could take a hot bath in her own bathtub or swim in our condo’s pool"- I'm guessing you meant 'their condo's pool' or 'her condo's pool' instead of 'our'.
Second, I loved it. I really did...and I know it's not funny, but I laughed at the part where you talk about Military bases being breeding grounds...because that's exactly what we would say. ;)
Even though Yamil and I were childless by choice at that point, I can tell you that I can simpathize with the feeling... I also cried a lot when I moved to Eglin; knew nobody, had no job, no school, no friends...and no kids. And even when I did meet people, and when we did go to social events, we felt so left out sometimes...like the fact that we didn't have children made us less important...or not enough of a 'Family'.
I was very sad there for a long time...
So you know, this may also touch many people, even if they have not gone through your same trials... ;)
Keep up the good work! ;)
Love,
-Patty
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